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Lie down next to me,
Look at me,
And tell me what your seeing…

Touch my skin,
Run your fingers wherever they shall go,
And tell me what your feeling…

Take my hand,
Guide it anywhere,
And tell me where your going…

Go out into the world,
And tell me what your seeing…

Do you feel for me,
What I’m feeling for you?

Watch my lips,
Listen to them as they move,
Tell me what your hearing…

When your out in the world,
Sun on your face,
Tell me,
Are you feeling warmth,
Or are you feeling the cold…

When your out in the world,
Raining down on you,
Catch the water in your mouth,
And show me how it tastes…

Take my hand,
While I’m lying next to you,
Tell me,
What are you seeing?
What are you feeling?
Where are you going?

Would you believe me,
If I told you,
I love you…?
I was listening to Dido's Take My Hand yesterday, and it inspired me to write this... There's not much to inspire me lately, I didn't stay in Coffs... Where much of my writing time is spent... So I decided to let Dido's music inspire me...
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JPlanet12 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2006
this piece is very very beautiful...
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lyingthoughtsspiral Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2006
Thankyou, and thankyou for the fave =) xxx
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JPlanet12 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2006
its a pleasure :)
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OperationDirtbag Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006
i give it three cakes out of two cakes...hey...even skinny kids love cakes!
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lyingthoughtsspiral Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006
Who doesn't love cake?! Lol. Ta for the favourite!
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Lerianna Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2006  Hobbyist Writer
This one is definitely one of my favorites. You are so good at writing lyric type of poetry.
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lyingthoughtsspiral Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2006
Thankyou, I'd love it if they became lyrics... =) xxx
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MysticalPoet Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2006   Writer
I really love these lyrics! So simple, yet full of emotion. Always let songs inspire you because then you know they are touching your soul. A love I want, have never had, and might never have. This song really touches my heart. Beautifully written, me friend.
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lyingthoughtsspiral Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2006
I am so glad it's had that effect on you!!! xxx
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Compassion81 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2006
This is beautiful my friend! It is perfect in every way! I love poetry like this - it's real - it's from the heart, exactly as you were inspired to write it. Standing Ovation!!!!!
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